I should say as context that I had been having a conversation on Mastodon in which I got the idea to write a poem that was somehow both a haiku and a limerick. I wrote the following myself. (The ChatGPT part comes later.) I've numbered the lines to make it more intelligible:
0 There once was a would-be haiku 1 Wedged late in a lim'rick venue 2 Ending a hero 3 Numbered from zero 4 Its lines went three, four and two
If it helps in understanding it, I went on to say in the other forum, the haiku to be extracted and rearranged is this one:
Numbered from zero Its lines went three, four and two Ending a hero
But while I'm proud I was able to come up with anything that was both limerick and haiku, I have to admit it's a more boring haiku than I'd aspired to. So I later wondered if ChatGPT could help me do better. That's what led to the following odd exchange a few days ago, in which it's clear that ChatGPT can do amazing things in some ways, yet be hampered with sometimes the simplest of things in others.
I came to wonder through this if it even knows what a syllable is. Perhaps it has just seen so many haikus that it doesn't need to count, and when asked to write something similar to, but not the same as, a 5-7-5 haiku, it doesn't know what the goal is at all?
See what you think...
write a haiku about the beauty of a snowy day
Snowflakes dance down Peaceful white blanket unfolds Winter's pure delight
write a limerick in which the last three lines, if rearranged, would be syntactically valid as a haiku and in which the first two lines introduce that haiku.
In the park, a snowflake lands A symbol of winter's grace Peaceful, it descends Covering earth's face with white Nature's beauty in sight.
that isn't quite right. in a limerick, the first, second, and fifth line are long. so to embed a haiku in a limerick, the embedded haiku will have to use the form 5-5-7.
Note that the apology here is part of the limerick! Is that it being clever or just revealing it doesn't know the difference between the task and related meta-conversation?
Oh, my apologies, I see Let me write it now correctly A snowflake takes its flight Brings peace to the winter night In a dance of grace, so free.
Write a fresh 5-5-7 haiku, in other words with the long line being last.
Beneath a winter sky Snowflakes gently fall like dreams Peaceful and serene.
In a 5-5-7 haiku, the second and third lines are exchanged.
Gently falling snowflakes Beneath a peaceful winter sky Serene dreams descend.
No. It should say "Gently falling snowflakes. / Serene dreams descend / Beneath a peaceful winter sky." so that 5-5-7 describe the number of syllables in each line, 5 for line 1, 5 for line 2, and 7 for line 3.
Gently falling snowflakes, Serene dreams descend, Beneath a peaceful winter sky.
Yes, now modify the poem so the first and second lines rhyme.
Snowflakes fall, so gentle and light, Peaceful dreams take flight in the night. Beneath winter skies so serene, Nature's beauty, a lovely scene.
But it should still be a 5-5-7 haiku.
Falling snowflakes, so pure, Peaceful dreams that softly tour, Beneath winter sky serene.
In a 5-5-7 haiku, there are 5 syllables for line 1, 5 syllables for line 2, and 7 syllables for line 3.
Snowflakes dance, so light and slow Peaceful dreams, a winter's glow Beneath the sky, so serene and bright.
That is a 7-7-9 haiku you wrote. Tighten it up into a 5-5-7 haiku by using fewer syllables.
Snowflakes twirl, light and slow Dreams of peace, a winter's show Beneath the sky, serene and bright.
Author's Notes:
Thanks to Madeleine Begun Kane for writing a haiku about haikus and limericks and putting it on Mastodon, which inspired me to write my own original poem and to have the enclosed conversation.
It's fascinating out chance events like that influence our lives. My whole career has been littered with chance events that were as important as anything planned. (Programming language enthusists might enjoy my paper Common Lisp: The Untold Story, a record of an invited talk I gave at the 50th Anniversary of Lisp conference, where I recount a number of those. No, not in poetry form. Poetry, and especially a haiku, is a kind of apology or penance that I do to balance the fact that some of my other writings are quite long.)
There is some additional discussion of this blog post and ChatGPT in general where I mentioned it on Mastodon.
You can try ChatGPT here if you want.
All of the "haiku" in here is really senryu.
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